Friday, April 13, 2007

The Final Draft of Descriving a New Planet.

      I cannot believe that I am getting in this enormous spaceship that I have seen only on TV. I feel like I am just a tiny little bug in front of this giant monster. There are lots of people shouting with joy and taking innumerable pictures which enable me not to face them directly because of the lights. Finally, I am in the ship. I can see a lot of monitors, keyboards, small screens, buttons, and so forth. Although my major in the university was computer science, I am getting puzzled by them. Suddenly, a shout is going into my ears; they are counting down. This big guy is roaring as if it’s trying to kill me when they all shout the number zero at the same time. I am flying. I can feel I am getting off the land, the Earth.

      After sleeping for a while, someone is waking me up, and I open my eyes. I cannot but get shocked because I am seeing something like a planet through windows which looks exactly same as the Earth. The color, shape, and everything look perfectly same. When I saw it first, I thought we were going back home. Eventually, we are standing here, the new planet. When I look around, I cannot find any differences with where we live. There are many things; big trees as taller as a 5-story-building, a sky-blue river which looks totally same as Han River in Seoul, Korea, and strong sunshine which makes me willing to tan my skin.

      I am bending over my body to touch the ground which color is red and seems to contain a lot of nutrients. When I feel it by my fingers, I come to remember when I was young and played a lot of time on ground like this. Suddenly, I feel comfortable as if I am standing the ground in the past. Now, I am walking through the tall trees. The trees look like evergreens because the temperature is not that high enough for them to have that much leaves, so I cannot see anything around through the trees but leaves and branches. There is the river at the end of the trees. Water is so clear and limpid that I can even see rocks at the bottom of it. However, all these things are little bit weird. I don’t know why, but I feel something strange all at once. There have been no creatures in this planet since we came here; there were no birds in the blue sky, no bees near the red roses, and no fishes in the transparent river. What has happened to this mysterious planet?

      Suddenly we feel that something is coming behind us, and we turn back to see what is happening. There is something dark flying toward us with a loud and sharp sound. We block our ears with hands because of the sound which is too loud and high to hear. It is getting closer to us, and the sound is also becoming louder. Nobody is able to move at all. I shout that we have to go back to the ship.

      We are moving into the ship, but only one man is standing outside trembling without any moving. He looks scared a lot. I shout to him again, but he seems not to hear and move at all. We cannot but leave him and close the door because we all can be in danger if we do not do this. The pilots are trying to take off right away, but the ship doesn't work at all. I turn my head toward the window to see what is going on outside. I am getting scared and feeling like my body is becoming stiff when I look out through the window; there are innumerable bugs which are stuck to all parts of his body, and his face looks like screaming. Suddenly, he falls down like he is dead. The bugs are staying without any action and seem like searching something more. Then, they are starting to move slowly and getting faster toward the ship. Suddenly the ship is working! The engine is on and the ship is starting to take off.

      Now we are safe, but nobody can say anything. All of us look like getting shocked more than we can endure. I feel like I am dreaming of extremely bad dream that I really never want anymore. I look out through the window again. It looks like there are still the bugs outside of the ship, but there is only the planet peacefully and calmly.

1 comment:

Unknown said...

Scoring rubric will be available on class website by April 27, 2007
The scores are broken down into sections.
Each section is described on the scoring rubric.
Section I 9
Section II 9
Section III 9
Section IV 9
Section V 9
Section VI 9

Nice work, I enjoyed your paper.