for the first class in april

don't forget to bring 3 copies of the first draft.

new planet!!!

1st: thinking and feeling before leaving.
2nd: in the spaceship
3rd: landing on the planet, at the far viewpoint.
4th: getting closer to the planet or.. in detail. – differences with Earth.
5th: getting closer to the planet or.. in detail. - 2

I was chosen! It has been my dream since I was born. When I was a child, I dreamed of it every day. It is to go to other planets outside of Earth. NASA chose me as one of the selected people who can go to the new worlds we’ve never seen and been before.
I can’t believe that I’m getting in the spaceship which I’ve seen only on TV. I’m walking into it through many people excited and taking pictures. Now I’m in the ship. This looks so familiar to me because I’ve always imagined this in my mind. I can hear through the speaker that they are counting down; 10, 9, 8… 3, 2, 1, and 0. I am flying, and Earth is on my eyes
After sleeping for a while, the captain is waking me up. I open my eyes and I can see

websites

How good are your proofreading skills?

Go to
http://www.penandpage.com/EngMenu/gramtext.htm

then click on Proofreading exercises
Do exercise 1 and 2

Go to the following websites and click on Are we Townies or Hicks?
http://webnz.co.nz/checkers/proof2.html

Do the exercise

The Second Essay - "Are cars really necessary?"

Are cars really necessary?

     Since a vehicle was invented for the first time, cars have become one of the most popular things in the world. As the number of cars is skyrocketing today, some people argue that vehicles are not useful because of the severe traffic congestion. As a result, they believe that it is a waste of time and money to drive a car. However, cars give us more convenience than the other transportations. Technologies are also getting smarter and cleverer. Therefore, cars are really necessary.

     First of all, it is convenient to drive a car. When people use the public transportation, they feel inconvenient easily because they have to walk to the bus stops or stations, transfer to other transportations, there are lots of people in buses or subways, and they cannot obtain their private spaces. Moreover, drivers can save time and money. Admittedly, traffic jam is getting worse. However, as technologies develop, there are lots of machines which can help drivers. For example, navigations or GPS show the fastest way to a destination.

     To sum up, the main two reasons why we drive a car are its convenience and efficiency. Drivers can get in the cars in front of their houses and get off at their destinations. Furthermore, cutting-edge technologies provide useful information which makes them drive easier and faster. Although the invention of cars has caused some problems, new technologies have been answering to these problems mostly, and they will be solved in the future.

useful website

http://depts.dyc.edu/learningcenter/owl/comma_splices.htm

http://wwwedu.ge.ch/cptic/prospective/projets/anglais/exercises/welcome.html

http://www.study.com/

first draft of second essay - not finished, yet.

Are cars really necessary?

Since a vehicle was invented for the first time, cars have become one of the most popular things in the world. As the number of cars is skyrocketing today, some people argue that vehicles are not useful because of the severe traffic congestion. As a result, they believe that it is a waste of time and money to drive a car. However, cars give us more convenience than the other transportations. Technology is also getting smart and clever. Therefore, cars are still really necessary.

First of all, it is convenient to drive a car. When people use the public transportation, they feel inconvenient easily because they have to walk to the bus stops or stations, transfer to other transportations, or there are lots of people in buses or subways. Moreover, drivers can save time and money. Admittedly, traffic jam is getting worse. However, as the technology develops, there are lots of machines which can help drivers. For example, navigations or GPS provide useful information such as the fastest way to a destination.

Although the invention of cars has caused some problems, new technology has solved most these problems, and they will be solved in the future.

Homework due to Mar. 23, 2007

Topic: Are cars really necessary?

1. Write a three paragraph essay.
2. Six sentences per paragraph.
3. Pay attention to complete sentences.
Use a variety of sentence structure: simple, compound and complex.
4. Move your "basket" around: Dependent clauses beginning, meddle, end.

First essay(Topic: Do you like dogs or cats for a pet?).

      As societies are getting bigger and complicated, the majority of people are becoming busier and alone. Although many people are trying not to feel lonely, it is not easy to find any other way to overcome the isolations by spending with other people. As a result, lots of people have dogs or cats as pets because they are the best choices for lots of people to solve their loneliness emotionally and financially, and I am one of the people.

      First of all, pets can help people to feel not solitary but comfortable. Today, the number of family members is sharply decreasing, and they don’t have enough time to hang out with family members or friends because of their busy lives. As a result, they feel lonely more often than before. Moreover, the prices of buying pets are not expensive. This affordable cost makes people willing to have them.

      Loneliness is one of the serious problems for many individuals recently. Furthermore, their unlimited works make them isolated. In fact, Pets such as dogs and cats become friends when people need someone to talk and family members if they are alone at home. Besides, people can purchase them economically. Those are the things why I like dogs or cats for a pet.

Grammar Websites.

http://grammar.qdnow.com/ - Grammar girl.
www.chompchomp.com - Grammar Bytes. Exercises are really good to study.
http://www.wsu.edu:8080/~brians/errors/errors.html

the first draft - not finished, yet.

As societies are getting bigger and complicated, the majority of people are becoming busier and alone. Although many people are trying not to feel lonely, it’s not easy to find any way to overcome the situation with other people. As a result, lots of people have dogs or cats for pets because they are the best choice for lots of people to solve their loneliness emotionally and financially.
First of all, the number of family members is sharply decreasing, and they don’t have enough time to hang out with family members or friends because of their busy lives. As a result, they feel lonely more often than before. Moreover, the prices of buying pets are not expensive.
To sum up, loneliness is one of the serious problems for many people recently. They cannot make times to spend with other people due to this busy world and simple families.

Class blog.

http://tfj_ssu.typepad.com/ew4/

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